Saturday, January 03, 2015

Technical Topics -- On Modifiers

I was nattering on elsewhere about my stance on adjectives.
As I say, I'm not against modifiers. I'm just not in love with them.

Here's why, being general about it.
The strongest writing is powered by nouns and verbs. If we find ourselves needing lotsa modifiers, it may be because our nouns and verbs aren't doing their proper work.



At some stage of redraft, it's maybe useful to mentally pluck away all the modifiers -- the adverbs, adjectives, and modifying phrases -- and look at the writing without them.

Is this stripped-bare passage left without precision, color and exuberance? Can we perk up the nouns and verbs? Make them visual and specific?

Can we exchange 'the crisp, smooth-skinned, shiny-green eating apple' for 'the crisp Granny Smith'?

  
-- We're tempted by modifiers because they're easy to add. We can slather on three dozen adjectives in the time it takes to locate one good noun.


-- We're tempted by modifiers because most of the rare, impressive, Latinate words we know happen to be modifiers rather than nouns and verbs. (I think that's because our language base is Germanic. Latin is the fancy add-on.) 
And who doesn't want to sound erudite.


-- We're tempted by modifiers because we don't trust the strength of our own writing. So we concentrate on surface decoration rather than underlying sentence design. Then we end up with the dress way up above instead of the one here down below.

3 comments:

  1. Still smiling at your two dresses. Colin Dexter said: If you need an adverb to qualify your verb, perhaps you are using the wrong verb.
    But I sit on the fence on this issue. Georgette Heyer was fond of adverbs and adjectives and with them she created some wonderful images.

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  2. -and how could I have conveyed my meaning in the last sentence above without an adjective?

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    1. *g*

      I'm a 'use the right word' person. And a 'stuff your story into the nouns and verbs' person.
      So I'm not a hater of modifiers.
      I'm just suspicious of them.

      The passage below uses articles, possessives, and 'wrong' as modifiers.

      "I'm smiling at the dresses you use to illustrate your point. Colin Dexter said: If you need an adverb to qualify your verb, perhaps you are using the wrong verb.
      But I sit on the fence on this issue. Georgette Heyer was fond of adverbs and adjectives and with them she created worlds of drama and wit.

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